Saturday, September 13, 2008

Edit me

A critique of my life (a work in progress)

Overall, this life has far too many confusing multiple plot lines and the theme is often unclear.
Many of the characters are too bizarre to be convincing.
The author is relying too heavily on apparent coincidences which stretch credibility.

Structurally, this life is sound, moving as it does in a straightforward linear chronological fashion, which is ideal for a life.

Stylistically, however, there is much work to be done if this life is to fulfill its potential.
The author frequently exceeds the bounds of good taste and risks losing sympathy.
Her reply, 'I couldn't give a shit,' is evidence of her apparent inability to give a shit.

9 comments:

leslie said...

It's that Super Collider thing again, isn't it?

Debi said...

Yep.

Absolute Vanilla (and Atyllah) said...

That Hadron thingummywotsit is causing too much trouble.

But don't you just prefer writing your life, rather than editing it?

Debi said...

Hadron's wall?

Writing life, editing it ... yerk. It's hard enough just trying to live it ...

mutleythedog said...

Hahaha! Brilliant! I think my life was written by Dr. Seuss...

Rich said...

Hi Debi, I hope sunday was better than the saturday! Just thought you might like to know I acted on our chat in Jack's and started a blog. rich4thought.blogspot.com See what you think. Talk on saturday

Debi said...

Muts - The Dog on the Log?

Ooooh, Rich! Welcome to the blogosphere. Running over there now!

Minx said...

Your fandangled condooberators are overheating - sit down, now!

Debi said...

Oi! You leave my fandangled condooberator out of this!